In my class we have been learning to switch writing of our show don't tell. On a table we had to describe some emotions and don't say what the emotion is and it took me about two days to finish it and here it is.
SHOW
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Don’t Tell
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Brian pursed his lips and clenched his fists into tight balls. Try as he might he could not contain himself. Within seconds he erupted like a volcano.
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Brian was angry. He started to yell.
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An ache started deep in his stomach. He turned away as his eyes welled up with tears.
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Johnny felt sad.
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Bailey came out of her class room with a gigantic smile on her face. She started to jump and laugh.
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Bailey was happy.
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Jeremy had just hoped off the bus. To hear his parents screaming at each other he just froze.
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Jeremy was shocked.
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Tama was jumping up and down yelling with joy.
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Tama was excited by the rugby match he wa
s playing in that afternoon.
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Could you try do this without saying the emotions...
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